这个月就要考雅思了，但是作文还没怎么练过，这个第一篇，求给位给批改下，多谢啦！
这个月就要考雅思了，但是作文还没怎么练过，这个第一篇，求给位给批改下，多谢啦。。。。不知道能的多少分，呵呵。<br />
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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others <br />
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,however, argue that circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, <br />
<br />
should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these <br />
<br />
views and give your own opinion.<br />
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The issue of whether each kind of crime should be punished fixedly has sparked off intense <br />
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controversy. Some individuals claim that they agree with this view, while many others hold <br />
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contrary opinion that the circumstances , motivations and any other related factors should be <br />
<br />
taken into consideration while judging crimes. In this essay, I aim at discussing both sides of this <br />
<br />
problem and put up my own opinion.<br />
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It is undeniable that , to some extent, fixed punishment for each type of crime can indeed <br />
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reduce our workload in terms of many respects. To begin with, this fixed pattern can help us to <br />
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be less time-consuming and boost the effiency of judging crimes. So ,we will have more energy <br />
<br />
to do other meanful and significant things. Besides that, It is unnecessary to spend a large <br />
<br />
amount of money in checking the whole process of crime. What we only need to do is finding <br />
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out which are the solutions to these kinds of crimes according to the law.<br />
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On the other hand, the opponents argue that fixed punishment is unfair, as judging crimes is a <br />
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quiet complicated thing. The most vital we should pay attention to is not only the phenomenon <br />
<br />
of crimes themselves, but also the circumstances, motivations and anything relatedly. These <br />
<br />
factors can generate a variety of results. If we do not conside them, somebody may be put into <br />
<br />
prison incorrectly. What is more seriously, the goverment may not be trusted any more, and <br />
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the society will not be safe and stable. Therefore, it is definitely wrong to decide on the <br />
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punishment fixedly.<br />
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In summary, I concede that fixed punishment has a few advantages . Nevertheless, I am <br />
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convinced that it is not fair and can lead to seriously problems which you may not image.
我觉得lz的论证内容都不怎么好，展开不够详细，主体段一第二点逻辑上感觉也不成立，这个题目小姨十天那个范文还是啥来着我印象中不错去参考下，还有本坛大牛们的精华帖
作文最主要的还是内容和流畅感我感觉
谢谢哈。呵呵。
但是我看小姨的书，还有一些其它资料都说，文章内容不用profound, 只要reasonable.
你要么再看看顾家北的书
有些东西中西方看法有点差异的，还得看考官心情
还有simon ielts 博客
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