The increase in production of consumer goods has resulted in damage of the natural environment. What are the causes of this phenomenon and what are the solutions?<br />
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Environment issues have turned out to be one of the most predominate concerns to the human race since the Industry Age. The increase production for the increase needs of our human-kind, however, has great negative influence on the surroundings. This essay will present how the increase affects the nature and what measures can be done to address these problems. <br />
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The boost in production of consumer goods mainly affects the environment by two aspects. The most products that we used daily are manufactured by various natural resources. That means the more products are made the more resources are needed and, as a result, the nature tends to be over mined by the human-beings, which is definitely harmful to the environment. Meanwhile the processes of production and consumption will undoubtedly generate numerous discharges such as carbon emission, waste electric and electronic equipment (WEEE) and domestic garbage. Such continuous discharged waste will therefore cause heavier the environmental burden as a return. Some research institute ever reported that the waste generated in the past decades would cost Earth thousands of years of degradation.<br />
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Since growing production would generate serious influence on the environment, certain approaches should be done to reverse this situation. First of all, people could change the consuming style that they are accustomed to. In other words, people should try their best to reuse the goods they behave and thus to lower their demands for new products. By doing this, the production would be reduced accordingly. Another solution is recycling. The materials are recycled at the end of consumption and reused as the alternative resources in the producing period, which will ensure the least resources mined from the nature.<br />
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Environment is facing the challenge from the increasing consumption, while it is possible for human-beings to develop sustainably by implementing the methods mentioned above.
I mean 剑桥雅思3-7 后面的范文 当然是非考官系列的才有评语
我是为了找出5-7分作文的差别在哪里 有针对性的训练
作者: 典政成 时间: 2012-2-2 07:50
搂住，6不是目标，只要不偏题一般都有6。。。
作者: gaba1560 时间: 2012-2-2 12:11
不见得，我觉得lz的英语确实不怎么好啊。
我就评一下第一段吧，不正确的地方请大家指正。
首先从行文来讲，我局的第一句话和第二句话颠倒一下比较合适。否则逻辑不清晰
the increase production怎么解释，increase是动词或者名词啊, 灵活使用increasing and increased
Environment issues（issue？） have turned out to be one of the most predominate concerns to（of 好一些？） the human race since the Industry（industrial) Age. The increase production for the increase needs of our human-kind, however, has great negative influence(impact是不是更好？) on the surroundings. This essay will present how the increase（特指一下human needs or production） affects the nature and what measures can be done（taken？） to address these problems.
还有几处不确定俺就不说了
Environmental issues have turned out to be one of the most predominate concerns of the human race since the Industry Age. The increased production for the increasing needs of our human-kind, however, has great negative influence on the surroundings. This essay will present how the increase in production affects the nature and what measures can be taken to address these problems.
作者: rrqk9295 时间: 2012-2-3 11:12
lz的文章 小错误该点掉
还不能拿6分？
作者: uneea45410 时间: 2012-2-3 14:16
Some research institute ever reported that the waste generated in the past decades would cost Earth thousands of years of degradation.
脑子不清醒，就评一句。在剑7test1的reading1里有一个关于decade的组合，是over the past two decades。昨天刚记的，说错了你可以找我。刚翻了一下，是在F段里的。不是卖弄，书里现成的都没用上，还是先别做原创。
Environmental issues（这里用复数合适吗？我也不是很清楚） have turned out to be one of the most predominate concerns of the human race （加个ever？）since the Industry Age. The increased production for the increasing needs of our human-kind, however, has great negative influence（个人感觉还是impact好些） on the surroundings. This essay will present how the increase in production affects the nature and what measures can be taken to address these problems.
作者: 查理青蛙 时间: 2012-2-3 23:32
我查金山词霸humankind中间没有‘-’， humankind（[mass noun]human beings considered collectively (used as a neutral alternative to ‘mankind’)），并且我觉得用our humankind不正确，要么直接humankind，要么 us humankind，说实话我语法也是极其烂，不知道对不对