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发表于 2013-4-14 06:54:31
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来自： INNA
Travelling, therefore, give them a chance to escape from the daily grind to relieve themselves
改成Travelling, therefore, gives them a chance to escape from the daily grind to relieve their pressure.
The developing of modern transports also provides a possibility for the booming of the tourism industry.
改成The development of modern transports also provides a possibility for the booming of the tourism industry
现在有事，所以只是草草看了一下。蛮流畅的，有的地方用法也很地道。
小的语法错误和少量不地道的表达是致命伤，给你改的这两个地方就有体现。
规避语法错误，保持现在的流畅，以及语言再地道一些，就可以上7了
祝好运~
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