最近的essay

了泛光灯都

看了第一段就不忍卒读了……

It is true that the number of visitors has now increased in recent years for many reasons.
now和in recent years语义重复；visitor偏重指参观者，在这里还是用tourist好点，因为visitor的囊括范围小于tourist。

Clearly tourists are obviously of benefit from travelling around the world in many respects.
Clearly与obviously再次重复。sb be of benefit 的用法闻所未闻。respects错误，明显是想说aspects。

就这水平，别说7分，连6分也悬。

不好意思，楼主，俺比较直接。希望你再接再厉，争取早日上7。