关于g类作文task 2审题的问题

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刚练习了一篇G类大作文, 题目是:Nowadays many people do longer work hour and have more stressful to their,what do you think and how employers to do?



我是讨论长时间高压工作所产生的问题, 写了3方面可能会产生的问题. 但是看了网上很多人都是写是什么原因造成了人们需要长时间高压工作.



我就很迷惑了~按这个题目我理解的意思, 这两个方向应该都没有问题吧? 不知道大家怎么看呢?

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这篇是我写的，请大家狠批！

Topic: Nowadays, many people do longer work hour and have more stressful to their, what do you think and how employers to do?

In the present age, the issue of that people have overload of work on their shoulders and have been under higher stress has triggered a heated discussion. Lots of problems, such as unbalance of life and work, unhealthy in physiology and psychology are produced by this issue. In this essay, I would like to analyze the causes of this issue and bring up some effective measures.

Of multiple reasons, the most obvious one might be that people have to work for longer hour because of the increasingly business competition. It is apparent that business competition has been becoming more drastic in modern society, so that employees have to contribute more hours on working to ensure that company can benefit from higher productivity with lower cost for keeping employer’s profits increasing. Besides, the overmuch workforce probably will be the responsible for this issue. It is reported that increasing graduate students coming into workforce market, but the job vacancies are not enough for them, so that the competitions of job seeking and job keeping are going drastically. Undoubtedly graduate students are willing to work longer for getting the first jobs, while company employees have no choice to contribute longer hour for keeping their jobs. Finally, it seems that high living cost also leads to this issue. It is mainly due to the fact that house price and medicine expense are too high to be afforded. Consequently people would like to contribute much more time on working after hour for the handsome overtime pay to keep their life-qualities well.  

Accordingly, I will propose three solutions for employers to solve this problem. First of all, it is apparent that technology improvement should be the best way to improve productivity. Absolutely the companies should improve and update the technology instead of requiring employees to work long time for productivity improvement. Moreover, employees should have a flexible working schedule, even be allowed to work at home by employers, so that people can have more time for taking care of their families. Last but not least, it is evident that fully welfare services will help employees to keep their life-qualities well, thereby the fully welfare services should be provided by employers to their employees, including health care, house allowance, traffic bonus, and so on.

In summary, except for the reasons offered above there are still other factors giving rise to this problem. But I think if employers take some effective measures to solve it, their employees will have a good balance of work and life.

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我原来也是这个思路，后来想想其实从两个方面都可以写，但是个人觉得写这个问题产生的影响和后果会比较好写些。

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感觉应该是问题解决型
说说这个问题的负面影响或后果，原因可一带而过
再谈谈解决办法

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我在想是不是给出这种题目来练习，然后考试的时候根据那个时候的具体问题来写到底是要分析成因， 还是分析产生的问题呵呵。

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您说的第二段可以省略么？这样的话，不是没有分析既定事实， 而直接给出解决方法了么？

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我觉得第二和第三段应该取其一来写吧？ 如果两个方面都写得，会不会在规定的时间内来不及？ 然后再写employers怎么做。

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看了各位大虾的建议，我觉得得分析产生这个问题的原因， 看了些范文，好像除了题目明确给出说要分析既定事实所产生的问题外， 其他的基本都是分析既定事实产生的原因，然后找出相应的解决方法。 而且我也觉得这个题目给的不大完整。 呵呵谢谢大家的建议，我回头把我写的那上来，大家有空的话帮我狠批下！

悲观个

It is one report.

第一段 引言段

第二段 论述长时间工作/压力的原因 2~3条  （这段可省略）        

第三段 employees' 解决methods, 2 or 3.

第四段 总结 p2&p3

好看呢

"what do you think and how employers to do?"

怎么发现题目本身语法就是错的？ 没说完似的。

就按题目所说的。。。“What  do you  think”...那就是怎么think   都可以了。所以只要写的是 “longer work hour and having more stress ”   怎么讨论都可以。最后要提到 employers   要 do 的， 所以 关于劣， 最好提到对雇主的不利。

考虑到连贯性， LS  4 楼的 格式比较合理。 然而。。既然提到优劣， 那就是正反的例子都要举。要提醒的是，一大段中不建议出现多于一个观点。第二点 要分两段写。关于 employment  要做的。。。可以在总结局最后提出。毕竟要怎么做的方案，没什么可例证的。