n4kp3r82
发表于 2011-8-25 20:00:29
想想小学学中文就是靠背书，英文也一样，背个20篇《经济学人》之类的优秀范文，作文就至少6.5了。
64gyhuupk0
发表于 2011-8-26 07:14:00
1. 感觉用词造句整体有点口语话，不象学术类严谨的风格；
2. 字数似乎少了点；
3. 句子之间的连接逻辑性不够。
个人看法，仅供参考。
rew11
发表于 2011-8-26 19:07:00
小作文还可以啦, 能表达清楚就行了. 但是大作文有些问题.
1. 结构太过松散, 同时套话太多了, 套用范文的痕迹太明显, 这个要尽量低调. 借鉴为主比较好
2. 文章的逻辑性不够强, 改进的话, 先多准备一些材料, 同时要合理地连用连接词.
包括小作文, 连接词的使用太少, 结果就是句子之间的逻辑关系没有体现出来.
3. 论证的方式有点偏少了, 都是讲道理, 比如增加事实论证. 甚至可以举自己的例子.
建议多读一些范文, 增加语感, 而不是简单的套用一些范文框架. 据说现在雅思的作文很忌讳这个.
然后词汇的多样性, 句式的多样性和论证方法的多样性, 都能提高作文分数的.
加油! 6分不难的
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fpech037
发表于 2011-8-26 20:05:23
我写作从5.5到6
也纠结着考了四次
浪费了半年多的时间
后来版上童鞋推荐了两本书
慎小夷的那本十天写作
还有一个澳洲人写的九分作文
看范文的用意不是背
而是用来体会范文好在哪里
自己的作文差在哪里
九分那本书里
同一个topic 5分作文到9分作文
一目了然
基本能看出来为什么别人写的好我写的不好
环球雅思班虽然没有给我带来太多收获
但是有一个还是蛮有用的
就是写作的评分人喜欢看到的文章
是这一句和下一句有逻辑关系 是符合正常人的思维方式
是能猜测到的
这就是为什么有的人文章其实不错
但是读起来吃力 这一句和下一句的连接关系混乱
额
成绩不高 不敢妄语
jdsjdqnr4
发表于 2011-8-26 22:25:41
必须找前考官审批，并且固定就用一种模板，什么都用这个套。别来回换方式，一定要固定。
Thintyroyania
发表于 2011-8-26 23:30:52
LZ一定要读读这个
[摩天楼竣工]独门烤鸭菜谱，简单易操作，作文从5.5变7.5哟亲！不接受中差评的哟亲！
http://localau.com/thread-968114-1-1.html
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秦家的老虎
发表于 2011-8-27 04:38:10
谢谢大家的热情指点，太感动了。。
秦家的老虎
发表于 2011-8-27 16:29:16
To#15，怎么找前考官呢？可以通过培训中心联系？
LesAlleld
发表于 2011-8-27 19:54:38
以我当年的悲惨经历, 如果目标仅是6分这个级别的话, 背背模板和范文中发光的句子还是非常见效&省力的.
试想, 没有大规模的输入, 拿什么进行强有力的输出呢? 呵呵
加油! 顺便再推荐一下慎小疑的《十天》, 挺好的一本书 : )
CruityCrype
发表于 2011-8-27 21:45:10
我也来学习，自己写了大约10篇的样子，没改，没请教过，正发愁下一步怎么办呢，我都没有卡时间写的，一般要花2个多小时弄一篇呢，大家也指点下啊。
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