更新了！看了这个，就都会写雅思作文，除非……
雅思写作，每天看见很多同学贴文章上来，呵呵，一个月前我也这么干的，但是某年某月的某一天，我顿悟了。虽然我最后结果还没有出来，考试当天也不是这样写的，但是我把自己的想法跟大家分享一下。<br />
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大家不要老是问，我这个多少分，如果提高多少分，评分标准贴过无数次了，大家自己对照看看就知道自己多少分了。<br />
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其实，作文并没有那么神秘，开头，主体，结尾，打完收工。<br />
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开头一段最简单，介绍背景+点题+观点/承上启下<br />
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结尾也很简单，提出最终的结论，用已经讨论过的观点来支持结论。觉得自己不够，再回顾过去展望未来。<br />
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主体段落是大家都挠头的地方，我就讲讲对于主体段落的理解吧。<br />
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构思的东西这个帖子里面就不讲了，主要讲行文。<br />
当我们提出了一个观点，我们如何来对于这个观点进行支持。我们用一个例子来说明：<br />
a. 这个护肤品很好。（提出观点，下面进行支持）因为价格便宜、质量好、用户用了都说好。再举例，王大妈用了如何，张大爷用了咋样。<br />
大家觉得这样的行文好么？先不要下结论，看看下面的。<br />
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b. 这个护肤品保湿效果好。（提出观点，注意哦，这个观点相对上面那个观点要具体得多，下面进行支持。）<br />
它采用了某某材料，经过了多少道工序的严格加工提纯，保证了有效成分高达百分之多少。<br />
高含量的有效成分在肌肤表面可以迅速的被皮肤吸收，并且锁住水分长达多少小时。<br />
相比其他品牌，它的保湿效果提高了百分之多少，保湿时间延长了多少。<br />
也就是说，只要你购买了这个产品，早上用一次，一整天都不用担心自己的娇嫩的肌肤受到干燥空气的影响，特别是在北方，从而帮你留住青春，一直美下去。<br />
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大家觉得那种论述的效果更好？我不知道别人怎么想，我自己觉得第二种比较好。<br />
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大家注意，我把四句话弄成了四行，来引起大家的注意，大家发现他们与中心句的关系了么？<br />
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卖个关子，也留给大家一点思考的时间，稍后来更新。]
拜大神
我还停在a的阶段，sigh.
lz 英文不错
好有兴趣想知道lz是做什么行业的
学习一下，
记住了ffab. admire lz's insight and quicly catching points
现学现用， 改写了一篇， 原来我有这么多的话要说呀， LZ 是大好人呀。
主体段2 还有待改善， 主要是字已经超了， 所以没说透彻。
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Some people prefer to provide help and support for those in their
local community who need it. Others prefer to give money to national
and international charitable organizations. Discuss both view and five
your own opinion.
It is obvious that different people choose varied ways to contribute to charity. Some people give a helping hand to the local Community, while others favour supporting national and worldwide charitable groups financially. Means of charity are really crucial since they lead to so distinctive results.
Supporting the local community is much easier to carry out and monitor.
People are more familiar with the status and know who really need help. Therefore, they can directly help the local organization or individual solve issues. Compared with other forms of charity, this kind of support can give more money to the community and can put into action more quickly. Moreover, contributors can easily monitor whether the local community allocates the money to targeted places. This can make the donation more transparency and avoid possible misuse of funds. For example, an individual, funding lunches for all students in the domestic high school, can go to the dining hall to verify whether his money is spent on improving dinners and building healthy menus. However, this view may not help plenty of people since it only focuses on the local area. Indeed, the world is full of problems and so many people need instant support.
By contrast, as large charitable organizations open plenty of branches
everywhere, they can help much more people. For example, in the Wenchun earthquake, a great deal of help from worldwide charitable rganoizations strongly supports the recovery and relief. Without those, people’s lives in Wenchun can not go back to normal so quickly. Despite that, low percentage of funds used in actual charity work and long duration to implement the plan are criticised by the public. Specifically, the cost to maintain such kind of organization should be a lot higher. Sometimes, it may take longer to implement the charity plan because of loads of processes ad procedures to follow.
To sum up, helping the local community offers more benefits to charity
since it is highly efficient and easy to control. However, in huge disasters, the involvement of the global organizations is also necessary.
我傻了， 因为.... lz 请去掉傻瓜两个字吧， 改成7分不是梦吧
楼主写作功底扎实，悟性也很高。是个很有写作天份的人。混迹在freeoz里难得遇上一个这样的写作高手(露脸了的，潜水的高人不算)。佩服佩服
用词准确度还有待提高，很多地方的用词显得有些生硬不地道；语法上也有些小错。
论述过程不得要领，对楼主的方法其实没有实质性的理解，只是学了个样，没有学到精髓。
严格来讲，也不是十分紧扣题目的要求。
估计不会超过6分。一家之言